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Many chinese people enjoy waching Spring Festival Gala on TV because it is a consistant custom in China. During the festival, it's time for people relax themselve, chat with their family and enjoy the TV shows.
However, some people not advocate such Spring Festival Gala on TV. Firstly, they think the Spring Festival Gala costs a lot of money and many efforts from the actors. Secondly, they consider the Spring Festival isn't very successful in recent years, most people, especially aged people, are not very enjoy or satisfied with the performence of the Spring Festival Gala.
In my opinion, although Spring Festival Gala is not very interesing or entertainment, as Chinese people enjoy spring festival gala through many years, the Spring Festival Gala has become one of the neccessary process with along the Spring Festival. So, I disagree to cancel this gala, but I do expect the leaders of the Spring Festival Gala make more efforts on the TV shows, make more interesting shows to attract more people. If people have decided to have Spring Festival Gala, just make it more elaborate.

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Many people enjoy watching Spring Festival Gala on CCTV, Because this is a consistant Custom in our country,
because 前面不用逗号， 也不用大写。 our country, 没人知道您是哪国人， 用china 更明确

Nevertheless,some people have put forward to abolish the system. Firstly, they think that Spring Festival Gala spend a lot of money. Secondly, they considered that the Spring Festival isn’t successful in recent years. Their performance isn’t in correspondence with（表演不符合大多数人的兴趣） the interesting of many people,especially old people.
people put forward to abolish the system, system 肯定不对， 您说的是春节联欢晚会， 不是系统， put forward 也不太准确。 还是advocate 比较合适。 they think that Spring Festival Gala spend a lot of money。 这里不用that, think后面从句that 可以省略， 但特指spring festival gala 要加the, spend是主语是人时候用的， 物作主语的时候用cost, 这里物是主语Spring FEstival Gala, They 这里非主语。 Their performance isn’t in correspondence with（表演不符合大多数人的兴趣） the interesting of many people,especially old people.感觉像中式英语。

although but 不能同时用， become a symbol in chinese mind, 没弄明白你要说什么。 what a happy all family members get together to watching performance in festival in evening.这更是有语病， what a 什么是感叹句， 这里无需， to 后面要加动词原形。 It's a great moment for faily members get together and have some fun with the actor's performance of Spring Festival Gala in New Year's Eve. so 比as a result 更确切。 好了先怎么多吧。 本人英语水平有限， 只是根据您的大意写的， 没expand太多您的essay. 若想提高英语作文， 就多多阅读英语书刊， 英语沙龙等都是不错的， 看文章的时候别就图一乐， 要仔细看句子的结构， 时态， 语法等。 还有好的句子要熟练地背下来， 这样可以照猫画虎用到自己的作文里

错误，我在这里给你一点点
1.and不允许去 - 而不是允许去的。

允许某人做某事或允许这样做

招标，我们可以安全去 - 我们是安全的，或它是安全的，我们去。

安全是一个形容词，你怎么能一个动词来使用它吗？

3.shouldn'吨下降产仔 - 不要乱扔乱丢

应该，不应该是情态动词，其次由动词原形也下降，秋天的意思，你是指扔扔好 /> 4。请后没有得到nosiy - 不要吵。

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5.Then我们不能开车太快了 - 然后，我们不能驱动我们的汽车在一个较高的速度。更快

的车是我们的车，例如：我的车去上学。
- 最后，通过看你的文章，发现你的基础不是很好，有很多小细节不知道，通常的无线电功能强大的，它必须是错误的。 。 ？

总的来说你这篇文章有点chi-glish，
大小写注意，
although跟but只能用一个不能同时用
时态也不统一
本人建议你重写一篇吧，特别是第三段，没有一句是对的
除夕是New Year's Eve

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