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Not untill you told me will(will改成did) i know how terrible i am.I blamed it all on that shopkeeper,now i realised(realised改成realise) it's my fault.
God,can you bless me?even a short moment,is that extravagant?i want,i want to be a mature adult,why it's so difficult?i thought i could do it well,but i failed.Having （加been）lost in so many life games,i still cannot get any experience,i am such kind of foolish.
Summer vacation is around the corner,i still cannot find any part-time job,is that hard???My friends,you always forgive me and encourage me,i thank you so much,please keep confidence in me,i'll try my best to get one,seriously!!

Finally,god,i hope you will stand by me for one moment!暂时三处~~~~~

I do not know how terrible I am until you told me about it...
God bless me，even for a moment. I am modest in my demands. Why is it so difficult to be a mature adult? ...Having lost so many games in life, I am still not experienced enough, and I am still such a fool.

I still cannot find any part-time job, why is that hard? My friend, thank you so much for forgiving me and encouraging me. Trust me please, I will try my best and get one eventually!

God, please stand by me, even if for just one moment!

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