英语自我介绍 帮我看看怎么样 有什么错误吗

觉得还好，不过because不可以是一句子的第一个词，把它跟上面那句连起来。而且是playing sports，不是doing sports。I have been learning it for 3 years.

I also worked in the student union before, so, i have the ability of organizing things neatly and correctly. I am a smart girl with kindness and responsibilty, and I am able to calmly deal with problems.

so i chose. 最后可能用reveal my dream，会好一点。

• “I am come from”有误，应是I am from或I come from

• “I'm XX years old now.”这里now最好不要

• “I have learned it for 3years”应是I have been learning it for 3years

• “Germany certificate”应是 Certificate in German 

• ”responsiblity“应是a sense of responsibility

• trying my best to 应是 try to
  
  

一般自我介绍是说ladies and gettlemen
for me to be interviewed here
I come from
the ability of organizing
improve my level of English and practice my oral English

i am come from中去掉am
realize my dream是不是可以改为make my dream come true

I come from 没有am