各位大佬帮忙看下这篇英语作文哪里有错误（初二）？

第一段那里应该是i have to go home，因为说的是当时的时态，是她说句子当时的时态。第二句那个beautiful boy肯定有问题啊，用词不当。其他的话语法基本没什么问题。

第一段里 引号中里有一句，改成 I have to go home. 那是直接引语，就用一般现在时。
第二段，孩子哭得越来越厉害。He cried more and more loudly . 用hard 不太合适。

I believe the most effective way to learn English is that speak loud in the public, and talk to some one whose mother tougue is enge lish, be brave and dont be shy, cause others will help you if you make a mistake on your speaking, if you dont even speak, you dont have a chance to know how good your english is, and you wont be able to know any mistake, more importantly, you can practise your english ability, so I believe speak english and talk to the natives are the best way to learn english.