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7-7.5 分

条理很清楚，论证很明确，句式用词相对多样化，这些都是优点。很好。第二段写得比第三段好。
但是，还是有些用词不够精准，语法小错误，例如
1. to precise --> to be precise
2. 第三段的第二个分点虽然我能理解，但是表述不够地道, 文化理解不到位：各个州或省在教育经费安排上有自己的权利; 而且很多研究资金也用于解决教育funding的问题。
Furthermore, theoretically the federal government is in charge of the nation-wide resource allocation, but the specific implementation happens at the state level. Individual state government has their own respective priorities and challenges. The decision on whether or not and how much to fund the education should be left to state government. The local governments should make responsible decisions based on the holistic inspection of the education objectives and plans of action.

Additionally, the federal government provides tremendous amount of funding in teaching and research annually. These funds may turn into financial aids for those who are more qualified. In return, these receivers get free college education. The selective investment may bring back more quality returns.

Take everything into consideration, it is my belief that the government and the students themselves should.... This may be achieved by government offering and assigning funds to individual states, the state government .... ....

7分以上
条理很清楚，论证很明确，句式用词相对多样化，这些都是优点。很好。
但是，还是有些用词不够精准，语法小错误，例如
1. to precise --> to be precise
2. 第三段的第二个分点虽然我能理解，但是表述不够地道, 文化理解不到位：各个州或省在教育经费安排上有自己的权利; 而且很多研究资金也用于解决教育funding的问题。
Furthermore, theoretically the federal government is in charge of the nation-wide resource allocation, but the specific implementation happens at the state level. Individual state government has their own respective priorities and challenges. The decision on whether or not and how much to fund the education should be left to state government. The local governments should make responsible decisions based on the holistic inspection of the education objectives and plans of action.

Additionally, the federal government provides tremendous amount of funding in teaching and research annually. These funds may turn into financial aids for those who are more qualified. In return, these receivers get free college education. The selective investment may bring back more quality returns.

Take everything into consideration, it is my belief that the government and the students themselves should.... This may be achieved by government offering and assigning funds to individual states, the state government .... ....

good