有一点小错
前面sometimes是副词无法引导时间状语从句,要加一个关系副词,主句“我想被带走”是一个与事实相反的情况,要用虚拟语气
其他的东西,something else
建议改动如下:
Sometimes when I stare at the sky, how much I wish that I would be taken away from here by air or something else as fast as possible.
语法也没看出什么错误。。。但是表达很中文化。。。