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The higer【high?higher?】 education fees【去掉s】 is increasing fastly【fast已经是副词了】,and some people argue that the government should pay course fees【fee】 for those who want to go to university.OPininos【opinions？】 are deeply divided as to governments should pay or not.【这句有点不通 Opinions are deeply devided into whether the government should pay or not】
AS we all know,government【‘s】 financial budget is never unlimited ,and if all the tuition fees【一般不可数】 should be paid by governments【不加s】,this indeed will【this will indeed】 increasing【increase】 the financial burden.But,【but不要单独放句首可以用however】those children who live in the remote rural areas have not enough money to pay【pay for】 the fees to obtain the access.What should they do?【一般别加一个问号结尾的短句 如果是反问的话好点】,therefore,governments【no s】 should be【不要be】 ensure that【不要that】 children an【a】 chance to access【access to？】 the university education.
On the other hand,university education always is【is always】,and will remain,【不要逗号了】essential for children's upbringing.【这句和前一句连起来 because也尽量别放开头】Because it is not only a platform to impart knowledge but also a stage to educate individual【加s】 about values and attitudes.At【in】 university【ies】,people can benefit in wider range.They【are】 more likely to be sociable and outgoing,cooperative and tolerant【sociable， outgoing,cooperative and tolerant你这样可以吧但是因为后面还有半句所以这里过多的逗号显的突兀】,and the most important 【thing？加个名词】is that it is necessary for students who is ready to get into society .
Personally,i think that the amount of government financial expenditure should be separated for university education,especially to help those children who live in impoverished family【families】,【分号或者句号】what is more,it is also an scheme to reduce the disparities between rich and poor so as to enhance the society harmony.

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