【急急急】求英语高手帮忙修改一下我写的自我介绍，如果好的还有追加哦！！

Good afternoon.
It's my great pleasure to have this opportunity to introduce myself to you here.
My name is ***. I would like to make my self-introduction with 3 initial letters from my name.
"S", it stands for study. I think learning is a feeling of satisfaction through which you can get some useful knowledge. My favorite subject is biology, because I think most interesting things about living things can be learned at the biology class. I also want to work in this field in the future. Nothing is difficult if you put your heart into it, right?
Second, letter “W”，it means wonderful. Of course,my life is not only filled with study, but also with wonderful things too. After finishing my homework, I spend my free time listening to music, my favorite singer (?) is Taylor Swift. When listening to music, I feel like I am floating in the music world. Don't you think it's wonderful?
The last one, "Y", Y is yes. I am a person who is easy-going and friendly others. So when someone turns to me, I always say "yes" to help him or her. I think it necessary for everyone to get along well with others.
I think it's very important I keep on learning and improving myself so that I can keep on making progress.
Thank you very much!

可以。

。。。。满怀激情 看到100分 ..改到一半 还是不要了吧 - - 建议你百度收个 会比较快 ，根据自己的需要稍微做些变动。你这里面语法错误比较多，还有就是自我介绍稍微偏口语化一点，不要可以的讲究用词。个人给你的建议呵呵。

下面的都不错 自己看结合下 ，根据口感 自己多读几遍 2分钟OK啦

给点时间，我给你改改。
Good afternoon,my dear teachers.It's really a great pleasure to be here.My name is ***.Now

let me introduce myelf with 3 letters from my name.
Firstly,"S",it stands for study.I think learning means a wonderful feeling since you

canbaquire useful knowledge.My favorite subject is biology because most interesting things

about nature can be learned in it.I also want to work on it in the future.Nothing is difficult

once you put your heart into it ,right?
Secondly,“W”，it means wonderful.Certainly,my daily life is not just about study.There

are lots of wonderful things for me to enjoy.After finishing my homework,I spend my free

time listening to music, especially Taylor Swift's.When listening to music,I feel like I am

dreaming in a world of music.Do you think it's wonderful?
The last letter "Y" means yes.I am an easy-going girl/boy and I will always

say"YES"when others ask me for help.I also consider it necessary for everyone to get along

well with others.
I think I still need to improve myself.That's all.Thanks a million!

I think learning is a satisfy feeling which you can get some useful knowledge一句改为I think learning is a satisfied feeling ，which can
bring you passions of study.
And去掉
由于是你自己介绍，最好用主动语态，被动语态用于强调宾语，而在此你因该以介绍你为主，所以Because most interesting things about living things I think in this class can be learned一句改为
Because I think I can learn most interesting things about living things in this class learn.
Then I also want to work on it in the future.改为I'd like to....
it's means wonderful中it's改为it
when someone turn to me ，turn加s
I 'll say "yes"to help him or her中to改为and
And去掉，and在句首表示那么。

Good afternoon,honorable teachers and dear fellow students.

It's my great pleasure to introduce myself to all of you here.My name is ***.Now let me introduce myelf with 3 letters from my name.

To begin with,"S",it stands for study.I think learning is a satisfy feeling where you can get knowledge and wisdom.My favorite subject is biology, for the most interesting things about living things can be leanred in biology lessons.For this reason,I want to work on Biology when I grow up.Nothing is impossible if you put your heart into it ,is it?

Secondly,the letter “W” means wonderful.Of course,my life is not filled only with study,but a lot of other wonderful things. After finishing my homework,I spend my free time listening to music, especially Taylor Swift's.When listening to music,I feel like travelling in the musical world.Don't you think it's wonderful?

The last letter is "Y". It means yes.I am an easy-going person .So when someone turns to me ,I 'll say "yes"to help him.And I also consider that getting on well with others is necessary for everyone.

I still have a long way to go.I'll make an effort to improve myself.That's all.Thanks.