请大伙帮帮忙改进或修改下列英语文章 我是小学六年级的 这是即将参加一个英语比赛的自我介绍 急！要比赛了

Nice to meet you all.
I am a twelve years old and as you can see, I'm a sunny and exoscopic girl.[exoscopic 外向的]
[My disposition is extroversion, the interpersonal relationship is very good!]这句话很不地道，不建议说。
I have a lot of friends and I get along with them well. [get along (with) 相处融洽；词组，地道。]
My favorite color is green, for its meaning is hope. [变换一下句式，不要老是I like ......]
Also I like listening to music. Music can always nourish people's heart.[音乐可以滋养人们的心灵]
Today, I am very glad[比happy好] and exciting to be here, to participate in[缺少了介词，语法错误] the [缺少了the]‘star of outlook’English Talent Competition.
[And I belive that I will try all my best to demonstrate！]中式英语，建议使用如下句子。
And I believe that I can behave well and show you the best of myself.[我相信我能表现出最好的自己]
[I hope i can pass the exam.]不建议说，很别扭。
可以说 I hope you like me and give me a chance.
Thank you very much.That's all. Hope to meet you again.[希望再次见到你们。]

总的来看：
Nice to meet you all.
I am a twelve years old and as you can see, I'm a sunny and exoscopic girl.
I have a lot of friends and I get along with them well.
My favorite color is green, for its meaning is hope.
Also I like listening to music. Music can always nourish people's heart.
Today, I am very glad and exciting to be here, to participate in the ‘star of outlook’English Talent Competition.
And I believe that I can behave well and show you the best of myself.
I hope you like me and give me a chance.
Thank you very much.That's all. Hope to meet you again.

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Nice to meet you all.
I am a sunny girl of twelve years old .
With an outgoing personality, I have good relationship with others!
My favorite color is green,because it means hope.
And I like listening to music.Music is sweet.
Today, I am very happy and excited to be here, to participate the ‘star of outlook’English Talent Competition. And I belive that I will try my best to perform！
I hope i can pass the exam.Thank you very much.

依照英文的一些习惯改的，并没有完全忠实中文翻译。供参考~

Ladies' and Gentleman, Nice to meet you.
My name is 你的名字.
I'm twelve years old which is a sunny girl.
I have outgoing personality and the interpersonal relationship is very good!
I love green color since it means hope.
And I like listen to music because it's sweetness.
Today, I am very happy and excited to be here, to participate ‘star of outlook’ English Talent Competition. And I believe that I will try all my best to won the prize！
This is all my opinion and I hope I can pass this exam. Thank you very much for all of us.

女士们，先生们，很高兴见到你。
我的名字是 (你的名字)
我十二岁，是一个阳光女孩。
我性格外向，人际关系非常好！
我喜欢绿色，因为这意味著希望。
而且我喜欢听音乐，因为它的甜头。
今天，我感到非常高兴和兴奋，在这里，参加'希望之星'英语人才的竞争。而且我相信我会尽一切所能得奖了！
这都是我的意见，我希望我能通过这次考试。非常感谢你对我们的所有。