帮我检查一下翻译如下的文章是否正确.

你的错误一大堆，词汇，语法几乎都帮你改过了，几乎是一片新的文章。改了半小时左右，现在已经凌晨3：39分了，你是初中生还是小学生？别着急，英语学习就是一步步的积累。祝你成功，另外希望你满意我的翻译。。。。绝大多数都是挺地道的英语，可能有点小错误吧。本人雅思IELTS7.0分，你完全可以信任我！谢谢

I have a personal computer, although it is hard for me to access to the broadband and games. Anyway,i like it very much.
sometimes i can surfer on the internet by the modem although i haven't equip broadband internet access. through surferring on the net, I find that the virtual internet world is more marvelous than what i thought .It almost include everything that you know: Reading, writing, songs, online chat ......Once, I have played many games in the school computer, so funny. Not only games, but also many moving essaies. Moreover WWW also act as a teacher to teach me how to write, chat online with others.it is so convenient that the disable also know what had happened without going outside on surferring .
The online world is a marvelous world, sometime my close friend said:" input a person's name in the GOOGLE, then you can find her photographs, put your photograph and her's in the same one by tech of PS, and finally input a password, preserves it. you can appreciate it whenever you want.
another function is that you can receive and deliever emails.it is a good way to save papers and beauty your letters,compared with ordinary mail by handwritting. After i can access to the broadband,the first thing what i want to do most is to send some emails to my friends.
The last function of network is that it broaden own horizon and make many opportunities to get news from
overseas. Now my some classmates have PCs, moreover their skills of computer are good,i call them little
doctor. From now on I will also study the computer harder.i swear that i will contibute myself to my motherland.
these days i always ask my mum and dad to equip the broadband , I will have a better chance to have a touch with mysterious network world!